I guess telling Mr.Chen the truth was worth it, all of it. The cheating the lying, the hiding. But, today I feel like a hero. Everybody says "hi" to me once in a while. I feel more popular already. When I walked into the school Sarah Collier flashes me this big smile that says "Thank you". I still got something for her. But, this girl named Ashley, to me she was the greatest pay-off of all. To me she's everything. I see her and think about cheating, Rob, Dan Sarah either way it doesn't matter. Dan and Rob are cool with me, in fact we're friends. I'm trying out for the football team just for the heck of it, you know, see how far I get. Katie congratulated me for saving her best friend she even gave me a hug. I don't think Mr.Chen or Mr.White appreciate what I did bit, they forgave me. That was a great day as I thought walking home. Mom tells me to clean my sisters room. Picked up some clothes filing some stuff. "Huh, what's this?" It was a yellow folder titled "GRADE 7 END TERM ANSWERS" Should I?
There in grade 8 and nice ending but i dont think Jake would want to go through all that drama again because his descision about calling Chen was last minute.
Katie I didn't expect it to be Jake but then I relized he probaly wanted attention.Even through I actually don't know if I should have been happy or sad about cancelling the boycott.Their were so many reasons: A:It got me and Rob back together B:I was anxious,but excited too C:It would have made school more interesting D:I think it made me and Sarah almost more closer to me E:I wasn't sure how the boycott would have went
Sarah I couldnt believe how many people boycotted all because i refused to give the answers to Mr.Principal. This is all thanks to my sweet Katie Patatie, and Rob.
After Jake's suspension, he walking down the hall. He was smiling and as though he was a new man. Everyone was "Hi" to him, and giving High 5's all around. He turned to the direction of me, and I gave him a slight nod in approval and a way to say thanks without looking weak.
i will never forget this, and I'm half hoping something like this will happen again. This was kind of fun.
i couldnt think of a poem to put into the chapter...
sounds great, the explanation for the nod is perfect Sarah. but a poem is essential to being Sarah, if you spend some time working on one, rather then hoping you will just spontaneously think of one add it on. I think this is the version I edited, but not sure any changes were made.
it actually worked!Many people actually boycotted school however, that was not the story. Jake the nerd gave Sarah the test answers that is a shock.Well first of all, why didn't Sarah rat him out and I wonder what Jake's parents punished him haa!Speaking about parents my dad did not even lay a finger on me also he keeps begging for my mom's ,brother's and my forgiveness.He keeps saying over and over "oh please forgive me i won't act bad like this again" he also talks to me and my brother way more[to say the truth it gets boring and annoying] .Also, when my dad talks my mom answers back hmmm... maybe miracles do happen.
Wednesday
Once i came to school Chen calls me to his office and with a groan i said "what have i done now ". However, he never answered back i went to the office and there i saw Dan , Sarah and Katie. i was glad i am not alone ! when we all sat with a mad voice Chen said i do not want to do this but the board of education rules leads me to saying you guys get a retest. we all cheered but we all thought the same thing. DO NOT CHEAT ON THE TEST
Retest is a original idea, very "happy" ending. Keep in mind that Rob is very short in his language. All short choppy sentences. never many words. Always simplistic.
Much of your paragraph seems a bit more enriched then Rob has sounded
So, it was Jake that gave Sarah the answers huh?!? But why? why now before the boycott? Why didn't he do it the moment we were all the office? Save us the trouble from planning the boycott. Save me trouble from calling almost everyone in the 8th grade. I started walking towards the steps up to school. Then I saw him.JAKE! People were crowded around him. Waving saying "hi's" and "what's up". And.....was that Ashley? Clinging to his arm. Since when did she have a thing for Jake? How did she even seem to notice him? I wanted to go up to him. Ask him why? What made him give Sarah the answer? But I didn't want to in front of that crowd. I continued to walk up the stairs. Then it hit me. This is the first time in along time I didn't fell nervous or scared walking into school. As a matter of a fact I feel happy. Relived actually. A huge burden was taken of my shoulder.I'm not scared to go home. Everything is back to normal.
Firstly,as I Rob said in the thought, it was the first time he didn't feel scared going into school. Secondly I decided not to make them get into trouble
Yes I like the idea of Rob being annoyed at Jake and his efforts. The style of asking question after question isn't really Rob. Does he really think things through with such detail. Isn't he on the football team, was he really nervous about going into school before hand.
That was the last thing I expected to see; Sarah cry. She was so strong during this whole fiasco I was just, surprised. I mean I knew she wasn't any Wonder woman, but I almost felt...equal. Either; A- Sarah wasn't what she seemed, B- her and I were closer than I thought, or C; all of the above. I think C. I let my thoughts simmer as my eyelids tumbled down.
-2 days later-
Jake confessed. I can't believe he was the root behind this disastor plant. What was Sarah even doing with that nerd? There has to be a reason why Sarah recieved those answers; how she recieved them. Option A; Sarah bribed Jake. Option B; Sarah blackmailed Jake, that didn't sound right. Option C; Jake blackmailed Sarah. Or, Jake did it by choice. That made sense! I means here Ms. Popular, "oh I'm so pretty, Katie Potatie!" And here's Jake, the nerd. He'd probably give up his mother for a chance at Sarah. What a geek, I'm just glad this whole cheating mess is cleaned up. After all, I was always a bit of a neat freak.
Yes, I do think she would think that. In the book, Katie mentioned how she just really hated to be left out of anything Sarah does. I think that Katie does put herself on a lower standard than Sarah. True, they are friends but jealousy stems from love, and Katie may not love herself like Sarah loves her.
sarah I was going to crack. I was just about to tell Mr.Chen something I would have never wanted to do in my life. Jake finally gave it up, he finally manned up and told Mr.Chen. I dont know how, but at least I didn't have to tell Mr.Chen the truth that day. For some reason everyone was noticing Jake, the most unpopular kid in the school actually got some attention. La! I didnt even notice that until after I gave him a head nod, you know just to say thanks and all. Im so glad this is over and hope this isnt ever going to happen again. Wow, what an adventure, so time for a poem.
Ive got into a mess, All because of a test I broke down and cried Katie could have died, from her fear of trouble she came to me due to her empathy
I was about to give it up, And fess up But then I got lucky I bet Jake feels sucky 'Cause he had to take the fall But then again, I had to go through it all
Sarah: As I saw Katie, my eyes were in tears. She told me that she boycotted. I never felt so respected by someone that would do this for me. As she told me more about the boycott, I felt different.
We went inside had milk and cookies, then let Katie talk. She was talking about, about, well I don't know what it was. I was so shocked to hear that more then 50 students would do this, I started to cry again. Katie in the other hand just attempted to make me feel better.
I didn't say a word at all. I was thinking of what will Mr Chen will do? Will he suspend all of them? What will he do?
-Monday- Mr Chen called my house and said 'you are allowed back'. When I came back everyone and I mean everyone was staring me down.
I ran to Katie and asked what happened? She told me that some Jake kid gave himself up. I was shocked. I thought he did a good thing. Maby you can say a sweet thing.
When he came back, I saw him and gave him a quick nod.
-Rob- "Rob!Rob!Rob!Your alarm clocks been ringing for so long, your going to be late for school!" Sorry Maa! time to get dressed and get ready for our boycotte. Stupid alarm clock!its so annoying. Once i reached downstairs, maa said i got a phone call. i look through to see who called, it wqas a kid in our schoo. i call him back, no answer. whatever. see ya lil buddy! "by rob" i love my little bro. I reached school and about 20 kids hound me. They said some guy named jake broader turned himself in and saved sarah.Looks like we dont have to boycotte no more.
monday so i talked to jake today at lunch. he said he blackmailed the principle for us.well we are lucky.we could have all been suspended.i am never going to even try to boycotte.
tuesday me, dan and sarah were called to the office.i was scared. chen told us he would take our cheating off our student record.on one condition.if he doesnt hear about us from a teacher or see us in the office for 3 months, we're good!
@ Prabhjot even though jake turned him self in.. that doesn't mean the others are off the hook they should n't get off the hook because it was their choice to cheat and take the answers and they did so they should get punished
it is not like this would never happen.my cousins friend was suspended before his highschool. so that ruined his chances of making a good highschool.but his guidance counseler took his suspension off, only if he didnt get in trouble again
Life is great, My problems feel like they flew away from me. I feel like I'm in a different dimension. Until I saw him... Him and I... I mean my Dad and I were getting along but i don't know if he's for real or just playing with me. But, we'll find out sooner or later. "Robbie" My brother called "Yes? Come in" he walked him with a bunch of his toys and smiled slowly, "Want to play?" he asked "Sure thing buddy" I said. Mom walked in and said "Happy Birthday Rob!" and gave me a kiss. "Thanks mom" I said. "Where's dad?" I questioned "He went out he said he was going to buy something" mom replied. "I just hope he remembers my birthday" I mumbled.
Dad came home with a box and I didn't know what it was so I asked he said wait. I wanted to see what it was, it was probable another of his star wars collection this time probably the Darth Vader Light Saber. I went up stairs and played with my brother.
"ROB!" My dad yelled I ran down the stairs and said "what?" he told me to open the box. I always thought he was a selfish person but not this time he bought me an ice cream cake. I looked at him, he smiled and said "Happy Birthday" It was probably the best day of my life .
I cant believe that my own Katie potatie had gone through so much trouble for me. Katie had planned this whole boycott and even skipped school for me. I was so happy seeing her at my front door. All I need at that moment was a friend-a friend like Katie. Katie had never seen me cry before, I bet she was really surprised, I was even surprised myself. I was happy to go back to school and also a little nervous. Jake had given himself up to Mr.Chen and he got suspended for four days. I think that if Jake had not given himself up I would have told Mr.Chen the truth, I guess I couldn't handle it anymore. I guess that I should have told on Jake in the first place instead of not trying to be a "snitch", besides I barely even knew him, he was just some guy that gave me test answers. Hmmmmmmmmm........ I wonder why Jake gave me those answers in the first place, but it doesn't matter anymore, I am DONE with cheating *Phew*
Well I finally got what I wanted. Ever since Katie came, I felt different near her, like we were the best-est friends ever. I didn't think for a second that someone would do that for me. Well as for Jake, things are different.
Time for a poem. I went out for Jake,didn't know he'd brake.He has a girl, that makes me wanna hurl. I had his back, but mine is about to crack. Anyway, I still think he's a jerk.
'Dan, as much as I don't like you right now,you are alright. I wanna just say that you and Ruby are good together because you both love yourselves. Hopefully, she does notice what a selfish person you are and gets over you', * finishing email* And Send!
Katie's coming over again. She said that we should meet in the cafe that she loves. My mom still thinks I need extra 'Help', so I finally said yes. I'm starting tomorrow. I am a bit scared.
As for me, I hope I don't get caught again, I have learned my lesson. Yesterday I promised my mom that I won't do it again, and I'm planning to keep my promise.
Sarah Wednesday I'm finally done with my suspension. Who knew three days can feel so long. Well, I'm done with that stuff. I walked into the school and almost everyone was starring at me! Dead silence. I felt awkward to keep on walking. I ignored them. After Katie potaty told me everything , all I was thinking about was how Jake saved me! I was looking for him didn't find him yet until I saw...saw him with Ashley? What? Mind Blow! Doesn't matter, I thanked him and went to class. just wonder where Katie was, to thank her too. All I'm sure is that I'm never going to cheat again!
I Know She Likes Me. We Were So Close Before. Shes Cute Too. No More Pimples. Shes Skinnier. She Thinks I'm Cute. I'M SO DUMB!!! Me And Her Would've Been Cute. UGGHH STUPID,STUPID,STUPID. Sheesh What Am I Doing. I Have To Call Her Now. Hello Oh Hi Mrs.Johnson. May I Speak To Katie. Ok This Is Stupid. Do You Still Like Me. Cause I Like You Back. And I Want To Be With You. Yes?? Really? SO TOMMOROW MOVIES 6 Oclock. YAAAAAAYYYYYYYYYYYAAAAA
Sarah: When it all began I had no idea, and I still don’t but will it finally be stopping by boy cutting? The sun rises the moon goes downs but why isn’t my frown upside down? I sit in the car and look down far I see Katie tomatie the peach of my eye he phone call to rob ran like a fly. I saw people coming my way shouting for my rights hip hip hooray!
Katie, rob and a whole crowd came marching to my house I got out the car and watched, boy was I amazed how they got so many people. I saw the team, and is that Jake Bader??? I found it was odd to have a last name boarder, border bah! But anyway what was he doing here? He’s such a goody-two shoes wasn’t he going to tattle on me? HUH! To be true I always though he was a bit cute ugh...a bit only a tiny winy bit! Then my mom walked out" wow! Sarah ...you are quite popular, you know when I was your age everyone surrounded me they loved my until I grew older and got married to your dad, that man ruined everything for me... IT’S HIS ENTIRE FAULT! And there she stared again OH MY GOD!
When I reached school Mr.Chen was already waiting for me and the rest outside and he began do you have anything to say for yourself? it sounded like a total repeat of when Mr.Chen caught that we ( rob Dan and Sarah) cheated. At that moment I said inside my head
Oh man, oh man I think I need a fan, don’t show my fear try to make I disappear what will he say I need to find a way save me, help me somebody can't you see??!?!?!
Then Katie stood up we will not stop until you agree Sarah needs to be free you blackmailed her and we will make it stop! Blackmail is in sight blackmail isnt right! Blackmail is in sight blackmail isnt right! Everybody started and I just stood there what was I suppose to do?? Mr.Chen got angrier and angrier then he shouted "EVERYBODY MY OFFICE NOW!" I took a step but no one came behind I stopped.Mr.Chen went back inside to the school and started making phone calls were they phone calls to parents? Rob began to sweat Katie began to think and I ........made up another poem
What mess have I got myself into, I have not one clue. Its like a repeat of the cheat, I bet my name is on that sheet. I am going to be dead as everyone said.
I liked how you emphasized she is in to poems and also how long did it take you to make those poems? Also you mentioned how Sarah's mom still hates her husband and how it was his fault. I totally forgot about that. Overall I think you mentioned almost every detail.
Sarah I made a poem when i heard jake told mr.chen it was him why did jake tell it all tured himself in I get to go back to school it's to cool.when I got to school I remembered about the boycout everyone was going to do today it was nice for them to do that I wonder if Katie is i hope she's ok I was nervsous tht mr Chen was going to suspend everyone
Now everyone was free but Sarah came back the same nothing changed about her even after I suspended but everyone else changed but he. Katie was happy because rob talked to her and dosen't feel awkward but after Katie and Rob became boyfriend and girlfriend but I got all Of them I got want I wanted they got suspended and I found out who it was I got what I wanted ahahahaa.....!
Jake? Jake was behind this. Jake was the one whom Sarah was trying to hide. Jake is the one behind all our trouble. That thought boggled my mind. Well thinking of the positives, At least our lives were back to normal I wonder why Jake gave up himself. A.He did not like the idea of boycotting the school. B.Too much guilt for him to handle. C.He ask his mom for advice. D.Alternatively, he wimp out.
This was a crazy time.Although everything had changed.Rob started dating Sarah after a while which didn't really get surprised after all they talked allot after the "incident." But thankfully Mr.Chen didn't suspend the others that cheated, he seemed like he was Sherlock Holmes coming to the end of this.But overall i have learned that i would rather fail with honor than to win with cheating.
Finally free from suspension.s-u-s-p-e-n-s-i-o-n. suspention..... sounds like a word that a police officer would use for treats. well, its used in school.Such hard times ive ever had-getting caught, sitting in the office, roaming around on the streets, cops arresting me,and the old mans "silent-freak-out" treatment, sort of. I was baffled in a scared way when dad offered a ride, and after a while alot of dead silence , the old man became nice to me.......ME, Rob.Unblievable. Never, never in my life did he offer some sort of kindness to me, especialy In this sort of a situation. I thought I was dead. I was dismayed. Well, what had happened, happened for good(except for the cheating part). Dont want to experience any sort of the cheating experience ever again. This adventure was full of guilt, fear and whta not! Just too much!hmm, I guess this whole cheating incidnet got me talking to katie really less. maybe I should go and meet her. Who knows how she is after the boycott.
wednesday
Beep!beep!beep! Aarrgh!! this alarm clock is tormenting me!Why does school have to be this early?!?! i get up, but really annoyed.like, tell me one thing;who really wants to wake up when a good football match is going on( in your head/dreams)and your favorite team is just about to win? i feel wear- also hungry(hope maa made pancakes for breakfast). got dressed and now getting my bag ready.GEO,GEO,MATH,SCI. double geography! firt thing in the morning! youve got to be kidding!!! ( i am soo in a bad mood!)
when i got to school everyone i knew said hi to me and smiled like everything was normal. did they forget that i had cheated on the GEO mid-term and got suspended?Brrriiinnhgggg! the bell rang and i had-urgh!Geography.
"Good morning sir" i said struggling to be happy, but no replay. Mr. White gives me a stare down. Is he still angry? Well everything’s over so who cares.
Long morning passed, and finally it was lunch. I was anxiously waiting for lunch (starving). its been long since I hadn’t talked to Katie, I’ll go and eat lunch with her.
"Hey Katie! Mind if I join ya?" I started.
"Err- sure come." Sarah replayed. All of a sudden Katie turned red like a tomato. Pretty odd.
Sarah chuckled and started her poetry.
“My sweet Katie potatie, is red hot like a tomatie. Something’s in her heart, Like a sweet sugary tart. Who knows what that secret is? Maybe she wants a little ki-oopsies?”
Katie turned really, really red and looked furiously at sarah. okaay. What was all that suppose to mean? Weird. I was confused so I acted like I didn’t hear what Sarah said. Still, I wonder what she means. Katie blushing hardcore, Sarahs poem-heart, secret, the last word kioopsies? oohhh! Katie has a secret crush! Who could it be? Dan, Jake, someone else or even.......me? What!?!? What am I thinking, we're just close friends, right? Or did it go a bit further? I’m crazy! We’re just friends and we're just sticking as friends.
I guess telling Mr.Chen the truth was worth it, all of it. The cheating the lying, the hiding. But, today I feel like a hero. Everybody says "hi" to me once in a while. I feel more popular already. When I walked into the school Sarah Collier flashes me this big smile that says "Thank you". I still got something for her. But, this girl named Ashley, to me she was the greatest pay-off of all. To me she's everything. I see her and think about cheating, Rob, Dan Sarah either way it doesn't matter. Dan and Rob are cool with me, in fact we're friends. I'm trying out for the football team just for the heck of it, you know, see how far I get. Katie congratulated me for saving her best friend she even gave me a hug. I don't think Mr.Chen or Mr.White appreciate what I did bit, they forgave me. That was a great day as I thought walking home. Mom tells me to clean my sisters room. Picked up some clothes filing some stuff.
ReplyDelete"Huh, what's this?" It was a yellow folder titled "GRADE 7 END TERM ANSWERS" Should I?
There in grade 8 and nice ending but i dont think Jake would want to go through all that drama again because his descision about calling Chen was last minute.
DeleteHAHA! funny ending!
Deletei think you need to fix the part about sarah saying thanks.
she just gives him a half a nod.
nothing very big.
Do you think Jake's new found popularity will last?
Deletehowever i thought sarah gave a quarter nod
Deleteno i think it is a one time thing because popularity you will have to maintain
DeleteIndeed a quarter Nod
Deletedo you think at that point jake would take the test answers
DeleteNo , i don't think his popularity would last a very long time because it would get old but he does have Ashley which would be something new.
Deletedo you think jake's parents are still mad at jake
Deletewhat do you think of jake's nerd reputation do you think he lost that title
Deletedo you think that jake is now not a good person in chen's eye
DeleteI'd say Mr. Chen is annoyed
Deletehow about you?
i do not think he is annoyed. he got the person in a couple days
DeleteEpilouge
ReplyDeleteKatie
I didn't expect it to be Jake but then I relized he probaly wanted attention.Even through I actually don't know if I should have been happy or sad about cancelling the boycott.Their were so many reasons:
A:It got me and Rob back together
B:I was anxious,but excited too
C:It would have made school more interesting
D:I think it made me and Sarah almost more closer to me
E:I wasn't sure how the boycott would have went
nice way to make katie's part more realistic.
Deletebut i think that the people still boycotted, but werent punished.
I like the a-e that is Katie for sure, but she thinks and thinks and thinks. A bit of build up before the list will make it pop.
Deletemake it pop?
Deleteyes this is good katie always thinks like this so you have made it realistic
Deletewhat do you think would happen if the boycott did not work and jake never told.
Deletewow you actually think katie and rob got together good i like that what do you think will happen after that
DeletePOP EXPLODE of the page and be a real level 4. Work on the dialogue and thought process of Katie before the list.
DeleteI like how you did the Katie ABC style, but I don't think Rob and Katie were ever 'together'.
DeleteSarah
ReplyDeleteI couldnt believe how many people boycotted all because i refused to give the answers to Mr.Principal. This is all thanks to my sweet Katie Patatie, and Rob.
After Jake's suspension, he walking down the hall. He was smiling and as though he was a new man. Everyone was "Hi" to him, and giving High 5's all around. He turned to the direction of me, and I gave him a slight nod in approval and a way to say thanks without looking weak.
i will never forget this, and I'm half hoping something like this will happen again. This was kind of fun.
i couldnt think of a poem to put into the chapter...
sounds great, the explanation for the nod is perfect Sarah. but a poem is essential to being Sarah, if you spend some time working on one, rather then hoping you will just spontaneously think of one add it on. I think this is the version I edited, but not sure any changes were made.
Deleteperhaps somebody could give Malav a few started lines for a Sarah poem. Just don't give up so easily.
Deleteso you think sarah thinks of jake now as a man
DeleteI don't think Sarah even cares about Jake
DeleteI though cheating would be enough,
Deletebut the easy way out was pretty rough.
At times I felt trapped handcuffs, but to my surprise Jake was pretty tough.
Nice poem but i don't think Sarah gives so much attention to Jake because after his confession she just gave a nod.
DeleteShe might not give him much attention but I definetly think she would give him respect for that move.
Deleteyes respect and public affection are different things
DeleteThanks for the ideas.
Delete@Mr Cheney
You didn't edit mine.
You just said to make it less about jake, and put a poem.
That is editing, content focus.
DeleteRob
ReplyDeleteit actually worked!Many people actually boycotted school however, that was not the story. Jake the nerd gave Sarah the test answers that is a shock.Well first of all, why didn't Sarah rat him out and I wonder what Jake's parents punished him haa!Speaking about parents my dad did not even lay a finger on me also he keeps begging for my mom's ,brother's and my forgiveness.He keeps saying over and over "oh please forgive me i won't act bad like this again" he also talks to me and my brother way more[to say the truth it gets boring and annoying] .Also, when my dad talks my mom answers back hmmm... maybe miracles do happen.
Wednesday
Once i came to school Chen calls me to his office and with a groan i said "what have i done now ". However, he never answered back i went to the office and there i saw Dan , Sarah and Katie. i was glad i am not
alone ! when we all sat with a mad voice Chen said i do not want to do this but the board of education rules leads me to saying you guys get a retest. we all cheered but we all thought the same thing. DO NOT CHEAT ON THE TEST
Isn't all that too Romantizied..??
DeleteThe father apologetic and the mom standing up and the retest?
Retest is a original idea, very "happy" ending. Keep in mind that Rob is very short in his language. All short choppy sentences. never many words. Always simplistic.
DeleteMuch of your paragraph seems a bit more enriched then Rob has sounded
true it is like that but i thought that would be a good ending because where we left off everything was fine so i just led on.
DeleteI think the sentences are a bit long, it doesn't really sound like Rob.
DeleteSo, it was Jake that gave Sarah the answers huh?!? But why? why now before the boycott? Why didn't he do it the moment we were all the office? Save us the trouble from planning the boycott. Save me trouble from calling almost everyone in the 8th grade. I started walking towards the steps up to school. Then I saw him.JAKE! People were crowded around him. Waving saying "hi's" and "what's up". And.....was that Ashley? Clinging to his arm. Since when did she have a thing for Jake? How did she even seem to notice him? I wanted to go up to him. Ask him why? What made him give Sarah the answer? But I didn't want to in front of that crowd. I continued to walk up the stairs. Then it hit me. This is the first time in along time I didn't fell nervous or scared walking into school. As a matter of a fact I feel happy. Relived actually. A huge burden was taken of my shoulder.I'm not scared to go home. Everything is back to normal.
ReplyDeletethis is Rob
Deletethis is very interesting however you kind of retold the ending
Deleteif you were rob would you be happy like this even knowing that there is a high chance of failing geography
Deletedo you think rob was scared of entering school
Deletei think that the cheaters should still get in trouble because they did take the test answers in the first place
Deletewhat do you think is rob's dad reaction to rob boycotting school
DeleteFirstly,as I Rob said in the thought, it was the first time he didn't feel scared going into school. Secondly I decided not to make them get into trouble
DeleteNice job Shelby, But i would try to guess the answers to the questions you were thinking of.
DeleteYes I like the idea of Rob being annoyed at Jake and his efforts. The style of asking question after question isn't really Rob. Does he really think things through with such detail. Isn't he on the football team, was he really nervous about going into school before hand.
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ReplyDeleteThat was the last thing I expected to see; Sarah cry. She was so strong during this whole fiasco I was just, surprised. I mean I knew she wasn't any Wonder woman, but I almost felt...equal. Either; A- Sarah wasn't what she seemed, B- her and I were closer than I thought, or C; all of the above. I think C. I let my thoughts simmer as my eyelids tumbled down.
ReplyDelete-2 days later-
Jake confessed. I can't believe he was the root behind this disastor plant. What was Sarah even doing with that nerd? There has to be a reason why Sarah recieved those answers; how she recieved them. Option A; Sarah bribed Jake. Option B; Sarah blackmailed Jake, that didn't sound right. Option C; Jake blackmailed Sarah. Or, Jake did it by choice. That made sense! I means here Ms. Popular, "oh I'm so pretty, Katie Potatie!" And here's Jake, the nerd. He'd probably give up his mother for a chance at Sarah. What a geek, I'm just glad this whole cheating mess is cleaned up. After all, I was always a bit of a neat freak.
@Buttercup,but do you think Katie thinks of Sarah as ms.popular and that she would say im so pretty?They are friends and Sarah loves her.
Deletemess and neat freak great way to wrap it up. also clever use of the nicknames. sounds very much like Katie
Deleteno mention of Rob?
Yes, I do think she would think that. In the book, Katie mentioned how she just really hated to be left out of anything Sarah does. I think that Katie does put herself on a lower standard than Sarah. True, they are friends but jealousy stems from love, and Katie may not love herself like Sarah loves her.
Delete@Mr Cheney Thanks. I didn't really think Rob was that important to Katie in comparison to all the other events.
Deletesarah
ReplyDeleteI was going to crack. I was just about to tell Mr.Chen something I would have never wanted to do in my life. Jake finally gave it up, he finally manned up and told Mr.Chen. I dont know how, but at least I didn't have to tell Mr.Chen the truth that day. For some reason everyone was noticing Jake, the most unpopular kid in the school actually got some attention. La! I didnt even notice that until after I gave him a head nod, you know just to say thanks and all. Im so glad this is over and hope this isnt ever going to happen again. Wow, what an adventure, so time for a poem.
Ive got into a mess,
All because of a test
I broke down and cried
Katie could have died,
from her fear of trouble
she came to me
due to her empathy
I was about to give it up,
And fess up
But then I got lucky
I bet Jake feels sucky
'Cause he had to take the fall
But then again,
I had to go through it all
this is funny and also that was a good poem
DeleteThat poem makes it fell so true. Nice idea.
DeleteAmazing Poem Donna!! Love It !!
DeleteYeah, great poem Donna!
DeleteThat is Sarah.
DeleteThank you everyone :)
DeleteSarah: As I saw Katie, my eyes were in tears. She told me that she boycotted. I never felt so respected by someone that would do this for me. As she told me more about the boycott, I felt different.
ReplyDeleteWe went inside had milk and cookies, then let Katie talk. She was talking about, about, well I don't know what it was. I was so shocked to hear that more then 50 students would do this, I started to cry again. Katie in the other hand just attempted to make me feel better.
I didn't say a word at all. I was thinking of what will Mr Chen will do? Will he suspend all of them? What will he do?
-Monday-
Mr Chen called my house and said 'you are allowed back'. When I came back everyone and I mean everyone was staring me down.
I ran to Katie and asked what happened? She told me that some Jake kid gave himself up. I was shocked. I thought he did a good thing. Maby you can say a sweet thing.
When he came back, I saw him and gave him a quick nod.
this is good you showed me how chen called back all the children i liked it.
ReplyDeleteThanks.
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ReplyDelete"Rob!Rob!Rob!Your alarm clocks been ringing for so long, your going to be late for school!" Sorry Maa! time to get dressed and get ready for our boycotte. Stupid alarm clock!its so annoying.
Once i reached downstairs, maa said i got a phone call. i look through to see who called, it wqas a kid in our schoo. i call him back, no answer. whatever. see ya lil buddy! "by rob" i love my little bro.
I reached school and about 20 kids hound me. They said some guy named jake broader turned himself in and saved sarah.Looks like we dont have to boycotte no more.
monday
so i talked to jake today at lunch. he said he blackmailed the principle for us.well we are lucky.we could have all been suspended.i am never going to even try to boycotte.
tuesday
me, dan and sarah were called to the office.i was scared.
chen told us he would take our cheating off our student record.on one condition.if he doesnt hear about us from a teacher or see us in the office for 3 months, we're good!
Awesome Chapter, but I would add more detail about what happened in the office.
Deletethanks but can you expand i dont understand what you said
Deleteya i agree this is a good chapter but i think that the detail is fined.
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Deleteeven though jake turned him self in.. that doesn't mean the others are off the hook they should n't get off the hook because it was their choice to cheat and take the answers and they did so they should get punished
it is not like this would never happen.my cousins friend was suspended before his highschool. so that ruined his chances of making a good highschool.but his guidance counseler took his suspension off, only if he didnt get in trouble again
DeleteLife is great, My problems feel like they flew away from me. I feel like I'm in a different dimension. Until I saw him... Him and I... I mean my Dad and I were getting along but i don't know if he's for real or just playing with me. But, we'll find out sooner or later. "Robbie" My brother called "Yes? Come in" he walked him with a bunch of his toys and smiled slowly, "Want to play?" he asked "Sure thing buddy" I said. Mom walked in and said "Happy Birthday Rob!" and gave me a kiss. "Thanks mom" I said. "Where's dad?" I questioned "He went out he said he was going to buy something" mom replied. "I just hope he remembers my birthday" I mumbled.
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Dad came home with a box and I didn't know what it was so I asked he said wait. I wanted to see what it was, it was probable another of his star wars collection this time probably the Darth Vader Light Saber. I went up stairs and played with my brother.
-------------------Few Moments Later-----------------
"ROB!" My dad yelled I ran down the stairs and said "what?" he told me to open the box. I always thought he was a selfish person but not this time he bought me an ice cream cake. I looked at him, he smiled and said "Happy Birthday" It was probably the best day of my life .
I really like how you explained everything.
DeleteDid you know that it was his B-day or did you assume? Overall, great story.
Deletethat was a good story
DeleteI cant believe that my own Katie potatie had gone through so much trouble for me. Katie had planned this whole boycott and even skipped school for me. I was so happy seeing her at my front door. All I need at that moment was a friend-a friend like Katie. Katie had never seen me cry before, I bet she was really surprised, I was even surprised myself. I was happy to go back to school and also a little nervous. Jake had given himself up to Mr.Chen and he got suspended for four days. I think that if Jake had not given himself up I would have told Mr.Chen the truth, I guess I couldn't handle it anymore. I guess that I should have told on Jake in the first place instead of not trying to be a "snitch", besides I barely even knew him, he was just some guy that gave me test answers. Hmmmmmmmmm........ I wonder why Jake gave me those answers in the first place, but it doesn't matter anymore, I am DONE with cheating *Phew*
ReplyDeleteI really liked how everything fits in well and nothing is out of place.
DeleteDo you think she is going to do other "Bad" stuff though?
Delete-Sarah
ReplyDeleteSorry about it being late but..
ReplyDelete-Sarah
Well I finally got what I wanted. Ever since Katie came, I felt different near her, like we were the best-est friends ever. I didn't think for a second that someone would do that for me. Well as for Jake, things are different.
Time for a poem. I went out for Jake,didn't know he'd brake.He has a girl, that makes me wanna hurl. I had his back, but mine is about to crack. Anyway, I still think he's a jerk.
'Dan, as much as I don't like you right now,you are alright. I wanna just say that you and Ruby are good together because you both love yourselves. Hopefully, she does notice what a selfish person you are and gets over you', * finishing email* And Send!
Katie's coming over again. She said that we should meet in the cafe that she loves. My mom still thinks I need extra 'Help', so I finally said yes. I'm starting tomorrow. I am a bit scared.
As for me, I hope I don't get caught again, I have learned my lesson. Yesterday I promised my mom that I won't do it again, and I'm planning to keep my promise.
u assumed that sarah knows what kind of a person ruby and dan are, but do you really think someone like sarah will recognize that?
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I'm finally done with my suspension. Who knew three days can feel so long. Well, I'm done with that stuff. I walked into the school and almost everyone was starring at me! Dead silence. I felt awkward to keep on walking. I ignored them. After Katie potaty told me everything , all I was thinking about was how Jake saved me! I was looking for him didn't find him yet until I saw...saw him with Ashley? What? Mind Blow! Doesn't matter, I thanked him and went to class. just wonder where Katie was, to thank her too. All I'm sure is that I'm never going to cheat again!
I Know She Likes Me. We Were So Close Before. Shes Cute Too. No More Pimples. Shes Skinnier. She Thinks I'm Cute. I'M SO DUMB!!! Me And Her Would've Been Cute. UGGHH STUPID,STUPID,STUPID. Sheesh What Am I Doing.
ReplyDeleteI Have To Call Her Now. Hello Oh Hi Mrs.Johnson. May I Speak To Katie. Ok This Is Stupid. Do You Still Like Me. Cause I Like You Back. And I Want To Be With You. Yes?? Really? SO TOMMOROW MOVIES 6 Oclock. YAAAAAAYYYYYYYYYYYAAAAA
Sarah:
ReplyDeleteWhen it all began I had no idea, and I still don’t but will it finally be stopping by boy cutting? The sun rises the moon goes downs but why isn’t my frown upside down? I sit in the car and look down far I see Katie tomatie the peach of my eye he phone call to rob ran like a fly. I saw people coming my way shouting for my rights hip hip hooray!
Katie, rob and a whole crowd came marching to my house I got out the car and watched, boy was I amazed how they got so many people. I saw the team, and is that Jake Bader??? I found it was odd to have a last name boarder, border bah! But anyway what was he doing here? He’s such a goody-two shoes wasn’t he going to tattle on me? HUH! To be true I always though he was a bit cute ugh...a bit only a tiny winy bit! Then my mom walked out" wow! Sarah ...you are quite popular, you know when I was your age everyone surrounded me they loved my until I grew older and got married to your dad, that man ruined everything for me... IT’S HIS ENTIRE FAULT! And there she stared again OH MY GOD!
When I reached school Mr.Chen was already waiting for me and the rest outside and he began do you have anything to say for yourself? it sounded like a total repeat of when Mr.Chen caught that we ( rob Dan and Sarah) cheated. At that moment I said inside my head
Oh man, oh man I think I need a fan, don’t show my fear try to make I disappear what will he say I need to find a way save me, help me somebody can't you see??!?!?!
Then Katie stood up we will not stop until you agree Sarah needs to be free you blackmailed her and we will make it stop! Blackmail is in sight blackmail isnt right! Blackmail is in sight blackmail isnt right! Everybody started and I just stood there what was I suppose to do?? Mr.Chen got angrier and angrier then he shouted "EVERYBODY MY OFFICE NOW!" I took a step but no one came behind I stopped.Mr.Chen went back inside to the school and started making phone calls were they phone calls to parents? Rob began to sweat Katie began to think and I ........made up another poem
What mess have I got myself into, I have not one clue. Its like a repeat of the cheat, I bet my name is on that sheet. I am going to be dead as everyone said.
I liked how you emphasized she is in to poems and also how long did it take you to make those poems?
DeleteAlso you mentioned how Sarah's mom still hates her husband and how it was his fault. I totally forgot about that. Overall I think you mentioned almost every detail.
good story,like abeeshan said, the fact that you added her mother hating her father was good. i think this was the only one including that
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ReplyDeleteI made a poem when i heard jake told mr.chen it was him why did jake tell it all tured himself in I get to go back to school it's to cool.when I got to school I remembered about the boycout everyone was going to do today it was nice for them to do that I wonder if Katie is i hope she's ok I was nervsous tht mr Chen was going to suspend everyone
Now everyone was free but Sarah came back the same nothing changed about her even after I suspended but everyone else changed but he. Katie was happy because rob talked to her and dosen't feel awkward but after Katie and Rob became boyfriend and girlfriend but I got all Of them I got want I wanted they got suspended and I found out who it was I got what I wanted ahahahaa.....!
ReplyDeleteJake? Jake was behind this. Jake was the one whom Sarah was trying to hide. Jake is the one behind all our trouble. That thought boggled my mind. Well thinking of the positives, At least our lives were back to normal I wonder why Jake gave up himself.
ReplyDeleteA.He did not like the idea of boycotting the school.
B.Too much guilt for him to handle.
C.He ask his mom for advice.
D.Alternatively, he wimp out.
This was a crazy time.Although everything had changed.Rob started dating Sarah after a while which didn't really get surprised after all they talked allot after the "incident." But thankfully Mr.Chen didn't suspend the others that cheated, he seemed like he was Sherlock Holmes coming to the end of this.But overall i have learned that i would rather fail with honor than to win with cheating.
ReplyDeleteRob:
ReplyDeleteFinally free from suspension.s-u-s-p-e-n-s-i-o-n. suspention..... sounds like a word that a police officer would use for treats. well, its used in school.Such hard times ive ever had-getting caught, sitting in the office, roaming around on the streets, cops arresting me,and the old mans "silent-freak-out" treatment, sort of. I was baffled in a scared way when dad offered a ride, and after a while alot of dead silence , the old man became nice to me.......ME, Rob.Unblievable. Never, never in my life did he offer some sort of kindness to me, especialy In this sort of a situation. I thought I was dead. I was dismayed. Well, what had happened, happened for good(except for the cheating part). Dont want to experience any sort of the cheating experience ever again. This adventure was full of guilt, fear and whta not! Just too much!hmm, I guess this whole cheating incidnet got me talking to katie really less. maybe I should go and meet her. Who knows how she is after the boycott.
wednesday
Beep!beep!beep! Aarrgh!! this alarm clock is tormenting me!Why does school have to be this early?!?! i get up, but really annoyed.like, tell me one thing;who really wants to wake up when a good football match is going on( in your head/dreams)and your favorite team is just about to win? i feel wear- also hungry(hope maa made pancakes for breakfast). got dressed and now getting my bag ready.GEO,GEO,MATH,SCI. double geography! firt thing in the morning! youve got to be kidding!!! ( i am soo in a bad mood!)
when i got to school everyone i knew said hi to me and smiled like everything was normal. did they forget that i had cheated on the GEO mid-term and got suspended?Brrriiinnhgggg! the bell rang and i had-urgh!Geography.
"Good morning sir" i said struggling to be happy, but no replay. Mr. White gives me a stare down. Is he still angry? Well everything’s over so who cares.
Long morning passed, and finally it was lunch. I was anxiously waiting for lunch (starving). its been long since I hadn’t talked to Katie, I’ll go and eat lunch with her.
"Hey Katie! Mind if I join ya?" I started.
"Err- sure come." Sarah replayed. All of a sudden Katie turned red like a tomato. Pretty odd.
Sarah chuckled and started her poetry.
“My sweet Katie potatie,
is red hot like a tomatie.
Something’s in her heart,
Like a sweet sugary tart.
Who knows what that secret is?
Maybe she wants a little ki-oopsies?”
Katie turned really, really red and looked furiously at sarah. okaay. What was all that suppose to mean? Weird. I was confused so I acted like I didn’t hear what Sarah said. Still, I wonder what she means. Katie blushing hardcore, Sarahs poem-heart, secret, the last word kioopsies? oohhh! Katie has a secret crush! Who could it be? Dan, Jake, someone else or even.......me? What!?!? What am I thinking, we're just close friends, right? Or did it go a bit further? I’m crazy! We’re just friends and we're just sticking as friends.
i like it but i think the first half is a basic summary
Delete@mrcheney
ReplyDeleteanthony has not been here the whole week, so if he doesnt come on the day of shooting, what is going to happen?
what was his role?
Deletenvm he came today
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